when a cloud
eclipses my face
a brow raises, the eyes narrow
so as to see better in the dark
when full lips
stretch into a thin line
the head tilts, slightly to the right
so as to hear the unspoken meaning
you may think
my piercing gaze
the sign of an inquisitive mind
you’d be wrong
it’s the little man,
awakened by your
near truths, your masked emotions
clawing his way to the surface
to get a closer look
so he can touch you, feel you,
taste the air escaping your lungs
his greatest desire
to be birthed
to be fully grown
to live in the light
will never be realized
for what would become
of the whole
without his watchful eye?
little man…intuition
eclipses my face
a brow raises, the eyes narrow
so as to see better in the dark
when full lips
stretch into a thin line
the head tilts, slightly to the right
so as to hear the unspoken meaning
you may think
my piercing gaze
the sign of an inquisitive mind
you’d be wrong
it’s the little man,
awakened by your
near truths, your masked emotions
clawing his way to the surface
to get a closer look
so he can touch you, feel you,
taste the air escaping your lungs
his greatest desire
to be birthed
to be fully grown
to live in the light
will never be realized
for what would become
of the whole
without his watchful eye?
little man…intuition
intuition…little man
Written in response to: Read, Write Prompt #82: Ode to Your Homunculus
11 comments:
You took a similar road, yet divergent path to my thoughts...
I like the imagery and feeling of this...
I like how you did it!
abstracting
Intriguing. I like the idea of the little man clamoring for a look, a touch.
Thanks everyone.
Homunculus was not in my vocabulary until this prompt came across cyberspace. It was a good exercise.
Your little man is almost like a parasitic twin, something that is part of a person but can never survive on its own.
Like this one....
Wonderful! I love your take on this.
nicely "cooked"...
I agree with Dana -- I got a similar feel on this poem as well. Nicely done.
-Nicole
Mutiny in Six Parts
I was almost afraid to see what you had been cooking...
but I'm glad I peeked. I really enjoy the tension builds and then you "let the air out." Nice.
I really like this notion of this "little man" as the embodiment of desire - -well done.
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